Here’s why it’s good to pay attention to the collective meaning of the words you write and choose to string together. It’s headline time. Which also proves that it’s imperative that you NOT piss off your editor, otherwise s/he might let your words stand as they are – which, in the cases below, prove to be hilarious!
STATISTICS SHOW THAT TEEN PREGNANCY DROPS OFF SIGNIFICANTLY AFTER AGE 25. -> Huh, ya think?
COUNTY TO PAY 250,000 TO ADVERTISE LACK OF FUNDS ->Makes perfect sense, but why wouldn’t it? We’re talking the government, money, and decisions right?
MISSIPPIS’S LITERACY PROGRAM SHOWS IMPROVEMENT <-No it doesn’t, unless this Headline was printed in the Washington post.
ONE-ARMED MAN APPLAUDS THE KINDNESS OF STRANGERS. <-Um, how is that possible?
CONDOM TRUCK TIPS, SPILLS LOAD. <- I got nothing to say to that.
PSYCHICS PREDICT WORLD DIDN’T END YESTERDAY. <- Phew! Wiping brow here, because you know, reading that I could have been dead and didn’t know it.
This is my favorite:
ARMY VEHICLE DISAPPEARS AFTER PAINTED WITH CAMOUFLAGE. <-Hokie doodle! Who painted that masterpiece? Da Vinci?
How many times have you read something and thought: Hang on a minute? Or, done the old head scratch, wondering how that made it to print.
M. Who obviously spent too much time this week in various doctor’s office waiting rooms – reading old magazines.
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SO ARE YOU A SERIAL SLUSH PILE REJECT???
Don’t be bashful, you can admit it and, now that you have, let me just say there’s more of us than there are of them. Who’s them? Why, they’re the ‘chosen few’ who skate through the slush and land with ankles shaking on a patch of thin ice, otherwise known as an agent/editor’s desk for further consideration. But enough about them – let’s get to us.
Here’s some query and submissions do’s and don’ts that any practical writer can understand.
DO: Address your query to the right person and spell everything that follows correctly.
Example: Dear Ms. Smith,
DON”T: Submet gleering problims or mispel names.
Example: Deer Ms. Sm8th. (They might presume the ‘8′ is silent but why take the chance?)
DO: Introduce yourself in a professional and normal manner
Example: I’m seeking representation for my erotic urban fantasy, A Time For Lust Stations.
DON’T: Be crazy or overly familiar with this unknown person.
Example: I just finished this sucker and it’s a real pisser! Check out page 43! That backdoor ain’t in a house! *wink* *wink*
DO: Detail a nice, clean and understandable synopsis.
Example: Drillwella is a eighteen year old nymphomaniac, who gets lost on the way to The Lust Station.
DON’T: Be confusing with the details.
Example: Drillwella, nervously sets out on the rapid car fleeter and watched the driver, the engine sweep, and The Wish-Making Dandelion Picker, while she thought about Willhedome, waiting at the distant lust station, with it’s white rooms and furry beds.
DO: Present some story question that hints at conflict.
Example: Drillwella abhorred Willhedome, so maybe being lost in the worst part of the galaxy in fear of her life, had an upside after all?
DON’T: Be predicatable.
Example: Drillwella eventually finds her way to The Lust Station and has hours of glorious sex with Willhedome. ACK!
Hmm.. When you look at it like that, it seems like it should be pretty easy to become a ‘them’ instead of remaining an ‘us’. Keep in mind that every agent/editor is different. Each one has their own pet-peeves and you’ll never be able to pinpoint or remember them all. So my thought? Since there is no rhyme or reason – fall back on the basics. A neatly typed, correctly spelled and properly structured introduction with just a hint of writer voice applied, will go a long way in impressing a bleary eyed agent/editor.
So, my last do and don’t?
DO: Submit clean and well organized pages, with a great story that leaves the person you’re targeting with additional questions at the end of their read.
Example: Drillwella hurriedly turned the corner and sighed with relief when she spotted The Lust Station. She stepped off the curb and would have stumbled, if The Wish Making Dandelion Picker hadn’t caught her.
“Careful,” he hissed close to her ear. “You’re smarter than I thought…”
DON”T: Be boring or too precise.
Example: Drillwella hurriedly turned the corner and with a sigh <- you ended here because your 50 page limit was up. Really? What a missed opportunity. No one said that you had to submit your work verbatim. Let’s face it. Do you think an agent or editor will call you on this? I don’t.
Therefore, I’ve decided that each submission I put together from now on – is going to be it’s own little package. I’m going to forget that it’s three chapters of a whole, and look at it like this is all my target audience will ever see of my work. And, with that in mind, I will ask myself. Do these pages pack enough of a punch to hold the reader’s attention? Do they leave them wanting more? Is the end part of the submission engaging enough to make an audience member, who may be on the fence over this project, curious to see where I’m going with it?
Oh, doing these things won’t guarantee that you’ll be published or represented, but they may just get you one step closer to plowing through the slush to reach that precarious ice patch.
…IS A WINNER!!!!!
My rating? A full line of martinis!
Are you ready for a hero and heroine who have a combustible passion for one another that’s hot as hell? I know I was and PRAY delivered. Ms. Bell weaves a compelling and smart premise with a tight plot-line that engages the reader from page one. The instantaneous attraction between Liam and Amalie, is awesome and literally sizzles off the page and the dialogue between them is snappy and right on-point.
Here’s the blurb:
Photojournalist Amalie Baptista is appalled by the wolf-hunting in Montana. She hopes that photographing these savagely beautiful animals will call attention to their plight. Her mission ends abruptly when she finds herself in the midst of a world she thought only existed in horror movies.
Alpha male Liam Albrecht is breaking every rule for the captivating Amalie, risking his place within the pack and his own life to protect her.
As discord among the clans reaches a fever pitch, he must find a way to save her from the monsters among them.
I absolutely loved Liam. Although, I have to confess, that alpha males are my weakness and he’s definitely an alpha! Tall, strong, and yet, totally helpless in his attraction to Amalie.
(imagine Liam sexing her up here)…murmuring words of encouragement. The blood pounded in his ears as his own body screamed for release.
“That’s it baby, let me feel you,” he ground out.
Amalie is a funny and compassionate woman with a cause. I connected with her immediately as I love animals, but more than that, there’s no silliness about her. She’s real, well-drawn with a great sense of humor. In a nutshell? she’s totally likable.
She met his (Liam’s) gaze in the dim light and replied steadily, “I’ll make you a deal, chief. If you stop looking at me like you want to bend me over something, I’ll stop looking back like I want you to.”
Here’s where PRAY, in mind, makes the cut as far as being a must read. It starts off with a bang and continues in that vein right to the end. There’s no rest for the reader. Between steamy and erotic sex scenes and characters you not only connect to, but emotionally bond with, you’re left dreading the approach of the last chapter because you know it’s all going to end. And it does, but not without a pleasant surprise. Yes, I was pleased to find that this evocative tale is just the beginning of a great series from Ms. Bell. One that I’ll be sure to follow and so can you.
Look for Christine’s newest release from CarinaPress: AWAKENING.
To reach her, just follow this link and click on her name: Ms. Bell. She has an awesome blog where she dishes out some helpful writing pointers and does the occasional critique for an aspiring writer.
PRAY was also Rated five stars by Paranormal Romantics!!!